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Monday, February 27, 2006

Illo Friday: Tea

Let’s Go Away For A While...



We started a story whose end must not wait.
We began a journey that founded new life.
We spoke a message that bought revolutions to cease.
We saw the unseen. We felt the gaiety of the unknown.
The erotic confrontation that startled our worlds,
has brought rainfalls and snowstorms pause and see.

Now, the stars are watching. Now, the color of the sky is fading.
You’ve come to the rescue of my demented soul
and shouted to the oceans to halt.
Tomorrows are of nothingness.
Now is the time. Now is the crusade.
I have lingered the lastingness of your taste.
I have absorbed the essence of your energy.
I have partaken the flesh of your being.
I shall conquer the depths of your soul.

And as I pour you once again in my thoughts,
the sweet scent of your spirit, the enchantment it brings...
I shall flutter my tongue and submit to your substance.
I’ll do what I please.
I shall endure the sensation, and soothe my agony.
Your warmth... it twitches down my spine. I ache for you.
I feel you to my bones, I feel you down my soul.
I feel the numbness of my body as I feel you within.

And finally I breathe deep and devour the alluring taste
of your aura. Your aura that I shall want over and over,
and over and over and over.
Your aura that I shall... never force myself to forget.


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note: This collage of pictures I took and was given to me was inspired by something i wrote years back.
It felt that finally, i have an image to perfectly fit my words, if not figuratively, literally.

It's up to you what your eyes and senses can see.. it's up to you to judge or misjudge..

This is my entry for collage was edited through Picassa and MS paint.

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21 Park your thoughts here:

Blogger Anonymous whispered...

Your image and writing is very erotic! My guess is you're the raspberry glass and not so cool as hot :)

27/2/06 3:31 PM  
Blogger atomicvelvetsigh whispered...

quite a lovely guess.. and the quench is quite exhilirating...

27/2/06 3:39 PM  
Blogger The Unknown whispered...

I really like the illo and the last part of the poem about devouring your aura, but my very favorite part was "gaiety of The Unknown" Bwhahahaha.
love

27/2/06 4:02 PM  
Blogger atomicvelvetsigh whispered...

ohh haa! thanks for sharing that thought. 8)

27/2/06 9:36 PM  
Blogger Ellen whispered...

Now this is my cup of tea! Beautiful!!!!

28/2/06 12:10 AM  
Blogger Roz Foster whispered...

Good thing there's an ice cold refreshing drink handy for after we all read your sexy poetry!

28/2/06 2:35 AM  
Blogger HARDWAX whispered...

Your illustration is beautiful, your thoughts are beautiful, and provacative. To look at your illo, without reading your words, looks like a lovely summer evening, perhaps for two lovers by the sea. After reading your thoughts, I think both glasses of the iced tea represent you, in the past the spicey red tea, and in the present, the cool fresh green tea, that needs to break free from the past, it's a kind of truce, A time away to really see yourself.

28/2/06 3:09 AM  
Blogger isay whispered...

iced colored tea! your poem and image brings me back to my memories watching the sunset in our country!

i hope everything will be settled soon over there velvet. you are all in my prayers.

28/2/06 5:23 AM  
Blogger carla whispered...

You really know how to create an alluring ambiance! What a beautiful illustration and words...

28/2/06 9:19 AM  
Blogger atomicvelvetsigh whispered...

ellen.. glad to share it with you...

Roz Foster.. well there is a reason why it is there.. lol

hardwax.. wow thats a nice interpretation! we all need to escape from the negative past clinging to us in one way or another. And as how you see me through both my works.. lets just say.. its indeed close 8)

isay.. sunset here in the Ph is amazing indeed.. but most of the time my job is keeping me from seein it in the open.. when i have more sunset pics i would love to post them here 8)

thanks for the prayers too btw.. too much things going on in the econ and gov here...

28/2/06 10:11 AM  
Blogger atomicvelvetsigh whispered...

carla.. thanks! it took a while for me to finish this poem (to finally decide it has gone to too much editing already).. had many versions of it that way.. well sometimes i feel what i write is still incomplete. making this illo kinda sealed it all.

28/2/06 10:27 AM  
Blogger floots whispered...

as i pour you once again in my thoughts
enjoyed the whole pic/poem combo
but the above struck me particularly
it sums up what so much writing actually is
thank you

28/2/06 5:04 PM  
Blogger Aristocrat whispered...

Dear dear, how have you been? Pardon my long absence. And to make up for it, I shall go on a rampage! Hahaha!

This will be the bitter pill after all the beautiful comments above. Hope you don't take it to heart.

Firstly, I feel that the poem is too long, it's not condensed enough? The length of it belies the urgency of 'the crusade' that you mention of. Perhaps staccato lines would help?

Secondly, there's too much repetition of the word 'I', I guess haha.

Other than that, a fantastic poem!

28/2/06 6:15 PM  
Blogger Veracity whispered...

Simply gorgeous! I have missed your poems...

28/2/06 10:50 PM  
Blogger Anonymous whispered...

I'm going away for a while ... *wiping tear from eye*

1/3/06 10:34 AM  
Blogger atomicvelvetsigh whispered...

floots, veracity.. i noticed too that i havent been writing (or posting) any poems lately.. too much things going on in the walking world that i lack time for myself, thanks that you liked this one. makes my stressful day bit lighter...

anonymous.. mmm.. let these words take you.. and fill you... hehe };-}

2/3/06 7:40 PM  
Blogger atomicvelvetsigh whispered...

and a special separate comment for aristocrat... hmmm first, thank you for sharing your thoughts on this poem. i welcome critics of all kinds, and not to worry negativity is not always offending.

so for the answers.. "poem is too long...The length of it belies the urgency of 'the crusade' that you mention of."

there are 'crusades' that take long.. and the longer it is the more meaningful, memorable and passionate it becomes.

"there's too much repetition of the word 'I'"

yes. but repetition will leave that lingering hypnotic flutter with the tongue. "I" not taking to context, is defining a crusade beeing seen through one's point of view not knowing what the other might be feeling.

"Other than that, a fantastic poem!" well thanks! 8)

2/3/06 7:58 PM  
Blogger Pat Paulk whispered...

AVS, a crusade worth going on! Like floots, the pic/poem work very well together. "Your aura that I shall... never force myself to forget" Love the use of the word force in this line.

2/3/06 9:47 PM  
Blogger Anonymous whispered...

heheeeeeeeeee };-}

3/3/06 6:27 PM  
Blogger atomicvelvetsigh whispered...

pat paulk.. haa! thanks.. well it's in the the imagination of the reader how words should play. 8)

anonymous.. see... hmmm..

3/3/06 10:10 PM  
Blogger Aristocrat whispered...

Ha, as usual it's always a case of personal intepretation I guess my dear girl. For me, urgent crusades = short and sweet :)

This really means you are going for a while eh?

6/3/06 8:48 AM  

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